Ragemelon series pitch

2010-11-05 21:32:59 by Sexual-Lobster
Updated

Ragemelon character designs

A while ago I met a producer who mentioned that ABC3, a TV channel for kids, was looking to develop new shows. I came up with an idea for a show called Ragemelon, based around Ragemelon and Bananacles, both invented by my friend James, whom I occasionally draw comics with.

Ragemelon wants to be a famous champion, but is clumsy and incompetent. Ragemelon meets Bananacles, and together they form a posse and cruise around a fantasy fruit/vegetable world looking for lost relics. (I won't post the script I wrote because that would be too embarrassing. (but don't let me talk it down it was totally awesome.))

I sent it to the ABC, but they weren't interested. I also entered it into a pitch competition run by a Canadian production company, it was a finalist but did not win.

So, with nowhere else to go, I may as well post the character designs here!

*edit* I forgot to mention that Ragemelon has appeared on Newgrounds before, he sits on the panel in Ask Raptor Jesus

Ragemelon series pitch


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suchosucho

2010-11-05 21:36:45

these
would make
the best
gummi
snack
.
.
EVAAAAAARR

Sexual-Lobster responds:

i guess ragemelon and admiral melon could be the same flavour. banana yes, apple yes. egg? would corn flavour work? pickle flavour?

CLAM FLAVOUR???


14hourlunchbreak14hourlunchbreak

2010-11-05 21:38:57

^ except for Spleen McQueen

Sexual-Lobster responds:

SPLEEN FLAVOUR YUMMMMMM


FatKidWitAJetPakFatKidWitAJetPak

2010-11-05 21:41:14

Good god, it would be like another hilarious adventure time. SORRY YOU DIDNT WIN.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

me too, although i'm not certain it would have been made if i had won, the prize was strangely ill defined.


DaicosDaicos

2010-11-05 21:45:03

Any animations on it for NG?

Sexual-Lobster responds:

no
although ragemelon sits on the panel on "ask raptor jesus"


boybogartboybogart

2010-11-05 22:01:05

I loved bananacles' design, but I just feel sorry for shame egg. He looked like he didn't want to live.

Anyway, the concept was pure gold. Who knows, someone might see it here and make something out of it.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

actually you're right there was some disconnect between his appearance and his character. i probably would have had to change that.


VertVert

2010-11-05 22:21:16

Ragemelon: Hero? Sociopath? Lover?

Tonight, on channel 4 news.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

Ragemelon would be all 3, and a wicked dancer to boot.


BettyCrockerBettyCrocker

2010-11-05 22:21:22

Spleen McQueen scared my shit up

Sexual-Lobster responds:

awww but he's so friendly and kind!


Amen1111Amen1111

2010-11-05 22:23:10

.... melon meets rage, my god what have you done???

Sexual-Lobster responds:

not pictured: when he gets really angry, he sweats seeds.


suchosucho

2010-11-05 22:38:02

theres a Veggie tales gummi snack that has asparagus/carrot/cucumber/tomato/and even a blueberry that all have fruit flavours differing from their corresponding cartoon vegetables. we could make this work. clam flavour will stay clam though. no exceptions

Sexual-Lobster responds:

and it will taste like reflux does the day after eating fish.


doondekadoondeka

2010-11-05 23:02:49

Twinkies look like nukes :3

Sexual-Lobster responds:

i don't know what you're talking about but it sounds erotic.


SpamClambertonSpamClamberton

2010-11-05 23:10:00

Try SBS. Couldn't hurt to try.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

i can see how it could hurt to try. pain of rejection, emotional trauma etc. the person who reads my pitch might be a stalker and they might kill me maybe.


FlashfireEXFlashfireEX

2010-11-05 23:15:34

MELON SMASH!

Sexual-Lobster responds:

i wasn't sure whether he should never get smashed or get smashed all the time and have the ability to put himself back together.

now i'll never have to make that decision. *phew*


MattyTMattyT

2010-11-06 00:35:56

When I come to GC for uni next year I'll write you animate and we can make a million billion dollars. Easy

P.s. Spleen McQueen should get his own show.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

your task for the next one minute is to write a sketch for spleen mcqueen and post it here.


Vandal2Vandal2

2010-11-06 00:51:03

This would make Abc3 watchable, they have no idea what they turned down.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

YEH THOSE FOOLS!!!

really though, the ABC guy who wrote to me actually read my script (all 4300 words of it), and listed the reasons why it wasn't suitable for them. so i respect the fact he took time to give me feedback, he didn't have to.

that said.......THOSE FOOLS!!!


RustyCuylerRustyCuyler

2010-11-06 00:55:03

Why not just give kids Fernando... It could be educational on two levels. First level how to be a man whore, second level what to never become. Either way it's a win win! I could only imagine how my life would be devoid of the internet and nice things if I had grown up watching Fernando oh how my childhood was cheated away from me. But on a serious note about Ragemelon, give him a hat, and a worthy catchphrase you sold me on the idea.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

wow you just blew me away. maybe i could just pitch pleasure island 2, completely unchanged, as a kids show, with the simple premise of "don't be a sexual deviant, kids".

what hat should he wear? a fez? a beaver? also, his catchphrase is incoherent screaming.


RustyCuylerRustyCuyler

2010-11-06 01:08:36

I wanted to say something along the lines of German Alpine hat, or a viking helmet with horns. The problem is I don't know what he sounds like I assume if you are voicing him Australian? So why not something along those lines some kind of Bush walker. Also some shoes would not hurt a champion can only go as far as his blisters let him. Sure kids wouldn't pick up on that but damit the parents forced into watching it would.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

viking helmet could work.


PiGPENPiGPEN

2010-11-06 01:16:48

yeah, i dont like fruit based characters....or vegetable based... i'm sure most children would agree with me on this.

I think if you wanted to pitch something as a childrens show, just take the stuff you normally do and tone it down slightly....your stuff is pretty much kids material already.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

you mustn't have seen most of my films if you say that!


PiGPENPiGPEN

2010-11-06 01:46:35

No, seriously... pleasure island 3 for example; replace the drug/sex/whoring references, replace the french kissing scene with something PG (regular kissing would be fine), remove the butt squeeze, remove the middle fingers...
and depening on the age being aimed for; maybe remove blood, maybe change female undergarments to swimsuits....
and you're good to go.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

that's quite alot isn't it?
essentially what you're saying works for anything

any film - adult content = kids show


PiGPENPiGPEN

2010-11-06 01:48:07

Actually keep the butt squeeze....I was thinking American standards.
We're in Australia, butt squeeze is fine for kids.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

surely not the butt groping though


PiGPENPiGPEN

2010-11-06 02:24:18

no no it doesnt work for everything...a lot of flash here at newgrounds, you get rid of the adult content and you'll be missing important plot points (if there are any at all)....but with your stuff the plot is still intact after removing most of the offending content....i hate to tell you this man...but your EDGY adult content is just surface material that can be thrown away without greatly affecting the story.
You're a children's cartoonist at heart.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

you said edgy first not me

to the rest...i disagree.


TateosTateos

2010-11-06 03:29:17

This idea has a lot of potential, in my opinion.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

thanks!


MagyarMagyar

2010-11-06 05:59:09

Fruit characters are overdone, most shows with them end up being boring.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

where are you from? i haven't seen any fruit shows. (i didn't do that much research though)


CarbonwaterCarbonwater

2010-11-06 07:01:15

Aqua Teen Fruit Force.


CutTheMustardCutTheMustard

2010-11-06 08:17:41

Please please please make this.


Zero863Zero863

2010-11-06 08:29:41

This would be an AWESOME show, the only problem is, who would the audience be for? Kids? Nah, if you ever get cartoon network or nickalodeon, watch their stuff and you will freak out, those people have issues.

Adults? They have reality shows and showtime, Dexter and Sparticus (COOOOOOOOOOOCK) are all they need.

Your only audience would be young adults, which may or may not have a station in aussie land, but in USA we have comedy central and adult swim on cartoon network. I would love to see RAGEMELON on these channels, but anywhere else and it would probably flop.

It would be truly epic if you could make this into a show, TRULY EPIC.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

the target demographic was boys 8-12, but the network guy who replied to me said that in his opinion the target was actually significantly younger.

i'm not sure what you mean with the cartoon network and nickelodeon part! they have issues?


SystemOfAtteSystemOfAtte

2010-11-06 08:39:14

shut up and make more pleasure island animations!
(insert ''b'' word here)

Sexual-Lobster responds:

heheh i'm halfway through pleasure island 4, haven't worked on it for a while though


VidGameDudeVidGameDude

2010-11-06 09:37:42

mayor oats bag would suffice mm yes...


RYNOLRYNOL

2010-11-06 14:03:11

Oh, so including Ragemelon in Ask Raptor Jesus, which was broadcasted on Aussie television I believe, was foreshadowing for his own series? Oh my Fernando! That's genius! To bad it didn't work out though. :(

Also, to discuss further upon PiGPEN's comments, why would Pleasure Island as it is not be suitable for kids? I know when I have children I will force them to watch every animation by you ever uploaded on Newgrounds. >:3

Sexual-Lobster responds:

those poor little bastards...


KnightsKnights

2010-11-06 19:29:51

A Melon-centric cartoon and Gallagher isn't a main villain? There's where you went wrong, my friend.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

aaaaaah the melon guy, for a bit i was thinking "huh, oasis?"


SpiritOniveraSpiritOnivera

2010-11-06 19:39:42

RAGE MELLON: In...

SEX IN SPACE!!

The conclusion: They die by collusion. You've gotta love that third law of motion.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

WHAT???


CroutonsOfDeathCroutonsOfDeath

2010-11-06 19:49:57

I would watch that, even as an adult. That show sounds awesome, especially coming from your mind genius mind. Plus I loved Rage Melon in Ask Raptor Jesus as well as those House of Squid comics, where he looked more like a fat pickle. Rage Melon is just so bloody awesome.

Shame it won't end up becoming a reality.

Sexual-Lobster responds:

i tried to write the pilot as something both kids and adults could enjoy. but the guy said it was too dialogue driven, so i guess kids just want action, apparently.


Zero863Zero863

2010-11-11 09:37:45

"i'm not sure what you mean with the cartoon network and nickelodeon part! they have issues?"

AdventureTime, watch that show and you will understand ALL.

I'm surprised he said the age would be younger, but I could see that. Still, being 20, I would watch Ragemelon on a daily basis just on the sheer fact of AWESOMENESS.


Hamodey1Hamodey1

2010-11-16 09:41:15

you sucks.


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